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 Post subject: Fantasy Novel- High Magic, Heroine, Ch, 4 Spaced Properly
Posted: Feb 14th, '24, 06:03    


Rehgai

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EDIT- New story hijacked my brain. First chapter rough draft posted below!!

The concept- Young female hero wants to make a name for herself and prove her worth to her family. The story will involve adventure, found family, fantasy and magic.

Striking previous idea but don't want to delete it in case I want to review it again!

I got this story idea- dystopian zombie themes, with strong issues with capitalism. I would love to find someone out of my group of friends to help honestly review the idea. Working on the outline, but also will have the chapters in the up and coming months. Uncertain if I wanna be wild and post them here, to be reviewed in a separate topic, or post it privately.

It would kinda be REALLY awesome if the book was really well received, and accidentally drew traffic to this site because the whole book is here.

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 Post subject: Re: Got a Book Idea
Posted: Mar 2nd, '24, 08:32    


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Rehgai wrote: Feb 14th, '24, 06:03 It would kinda be REALLY awesome if the book was really well received, and accidentally drew traffic to this site because the whole book is here.
that would be amazing!! :mccool:

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 Post subject: Re: Got a Book Idea
Posted: Aug 7th, '24, 08:04    


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I get book ideas every 6 months lol. But actually wrote this outline out a bit of you wanted to see it. Sorry for the delay in response.

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 Post subject: Re: Got a Book Idea
Posted: Oct 28th, '24, 08:10    


Rehgai

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Anyone doing NaNoWriMo this Month?

Gonna post the chapters here!

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 Post subject: Re: Got a Book Idea
Posted: Oct 28th, '24, 12:49    


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Ooh I look forward to reading them here!

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Stroctoperry wrote:Because KofK trumps homework, for some reason.
Death Candy wrote:I just realized that "take out" means food, dating, and murder. And if you were a female praying mantis you'd have all three.
Akili Li wrote:People talk about bravery in these super dramatic terms like it only applies to soldiers going to war, but for all that I think true courage is found in the hard every day moments of social interaction and standing up for what you believe in even when it's not life-or-death, when it's instead a matter of approval-or-ostracization among people whose opinions you care about. That's harder, to my mind. That's an ongoing, you have to live with it forever thing, instead of one single moment that's the exception instead of the rule.
AsheSkyler wrote:Bless the modern era's availability of so much art and creativity. [...]our ability to connect and share such wonderful things makes it a good time to be alive. :qh:


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 Post subject: Re: Got a Book Idea
Posted: Nov 1st, '24, 19:18    


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I’ve read a few post apocalyptic webnovels before and they’ve been interesting.

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 Post subject: Re: Got a Book Idea
Posted: Nov 3rd, '24, 07:46    


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Chapter 1

The Kingdom of Qalendor was known well within the Human nations as a just and fair Kingdom. The Bloodline, Nuryzer, was well established, and through marriage and trades, the Kingdom and those surrounding it lived a prosperous life. The current ruling King, Hyder, and his wife, Frye, had secured peace treaties for the upcoming century, if their bloodline ran true. And with 5 sharp children, few could imagine any hardships to come to the Kingdom. Then again, the treaties were just with Humankind.

Dwarves and Elves were known to the Kingdom, but no current treaties had been established with the Human Nations. Instead, an uneasy ceasefire had been established and well respected for the past 30 years. Beyond general squabbles, as of late, there was peace within the Kingdom. And for King Hyder, that was all he could ask.

But a little quiet with that peace would be nice once in a while. Especially at Dinner time.

Instead, the affair was slightly rowdier, from one individual. Estelle, the Third Princess and 5th born of the Nuryzer line. His youngest. And the current reason for his headache.

“I just believe there may be something going on in the West, and to neglect the reports would be... well... Neglectful.” Though Estelle was a few years into her teens, she still had a long way to go in the art of debate. Still, her face was ablaze with passion, hinting she would not give up her task without a fight. Her spot at the table had a series of scrolls and notes, presumably the reports he had dismissed in which she had taken over.

It was only the soup part of the meal currently, and King Hyder could feel his appetite wane.

A gentle hand came from below the table, and he raised his head, tilting it slightly in the direction of his kind and loving wife, who smiled back at him.

“Estelle, my dear, I love how interested you have become in the current court proceedings and political concerns, but it is wise to know a time and place to address such concerns. The dinner is not one of them.” Frye spoke with care only as a mother could, but also a harshness that befitted a ruler. She had earned her place as Queen, and would not let anyone, not even her own children, see her differently. It was a trait Hyder had fallen in love with early on in their courtship, a steadfastness that left no room for questioning of her goals. It instantly settled the youngest, but it seemed Estelle didn’t get just her mother’s hair.

“Though I would normally agree one should know a time and a place to bring up such conversation, especially over gazpacho, His Majesty the King has already deemed such reports as unwarranted concern. He believes the matter should be dismissed and dropped.” Estelle continued her crusade. An odd silence, heavy with the views of those around began to build around the table. She was blinded by her desire to be heard, but her parents, long used to such subtle shifts, realized that this would quickly become the talk of the household if it continued any further.

“Princess Estelle.” King Hyder spoke, his deep brown eyes darkening slightly with anger as he met his younger daughter’s eye. She might have her mother’s fiery hair, but she had his eyes. But unlike his, hers seem to fill with concern as she realized she had spoken too long and upset him. Before she could apologize, he continued, his tone carrying a harshness, but not in volume. In fact, his booming voice was oddly quiet, dipping down low to show just how mad he was at the current discussion. “As you are still young, it is expected to misstep occasionally. But do not forget- I am your King first, and your father second. I listened to the people’s grievances in court and supplied them with the help I could. In no way are any of the cases in the West connected. My word is final.”

When before, the silence had heaviness because everyone wanted to see a show go down, the silence following the King’s statement held its own breath, waiting to see what would happen next. No one shifted for a beat. Even the heart in one’s chest momentarily skipped in respect to the heavy atmosphere around the room. Before any other words could be exchanged, Sanders, Estelle’s Manservant and caretaker, bowed slightly and wordlessly stepped forward, removing the notes and documents from the table. Across the way, 2 of her siblings, eldest sister and First Daughter Bellamy, and the Second Son Dominick began to sip their soup. Even though no words were exchanged, Estelle had a nagging feeling her older siblings were currently gossiping about her. But she felt like an airless breath, the wind knocked out of her in a way. Still, at 17, she was mature enough to know storming off in a fit would win her no favors. She gave a watery smile to Sanders as he returned to his position behind her, and lifted her spoon, taking a small sip of the cold soup.

Slowly, the meal returned to normal, a soft conversation of nothing happened around the young Princess. But she ate a portion of her food, though her appetite was lacking after the tense negotiation. Still, Estelle knew without a doubt she would present her argument to her father. It had nothing to do with Crown progression- as the 5th born and the Third Daughter, Estelle knew her only chances of becoming Queen would be through wedlock. No, this was for her people and righting a wrong she saw forming in the Shadows. But one thing she learned a long time ago- just because you lost a battle, it doesn’t mean one loses the war. Instead, she bowed her head and ate her meal, the normally flavorful meats tasting like ash.

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After dinner, Estelle excused herself quickly, waiting until she was properly dismissed so as not to stir the pot anymore than she had. She quickly rushed to her room, followed by handmaidens to change quickly. Though she hadn’t ordered Sanders, the red head had a feeling her most trusted servant would know where to meet her after such a stressful meal.

Though it was an ‘informal’ meal, everyone still wore semi-formal gowns and suits to keep up appearances. Though such dinners happened once a month, where all the family would get together, Estelle had misjudged her approach. Still, the thoughts of the events to the West were fresh in the Young Princess’ mind, and her fight for them would not subside anytime soon. No, she just had to adjust her approach.

Unlike her siblings, Estelle found solace in the practice of the blade, the repetitive swing creating a sense of Zen. When she was stressed, most could find the red head dressed in a simple tunic and breeches, her long hair pulled in a single ponytail. The blade was her greatest achievement, a skill no one else could touch. The issue- an unused blade is often left to rust. Though many in her family and abound in the Kingdom recognized Estelle for her skill with the blade, in a time of peace, especially a treated time of peace, such skills were nearly useless. It often bothered the young woman, though her favorite stress reliever was her biggest issue in life. Still, she retreated to the practice field, her shoulders relaxing slightly as she saw the large form of Sanders on the field.

Sanders had been the first guard selected for the Princess when she was old enough to toddle about, but as her skill with the blade grew, his relationship of guard began to shift to one of guardian. Though he was a commoner, his skill with the blade was recognized, and soon he became the scholar for the 3rd Princess, earning himself a title as Baron. But to Estelle, he would always be Sanders.

He was currently warming up; a great sword being wielded one-handed. Though Sanders had entered his 50s and begun to gray, he was a strong man, muscles well hidden behind his uniform. But on the practice field, his muscles stretched unclothed, bulging out from the sleeve, wielding a normally 2 handed blade with ease. Estelle had a simple goal when practicing with Sanders- To land a single blow.

Like usual, the first round had no words exchanged. As an official adult, both were using actual weapons, and neither were in the mood to hold back blows. It was a well-versed dance, the student and the teacher dancing around each other in a deadly game. The round often ended when the first drew blood- always it being the red-haired princess.

For 3 rounds, the 2 danced around each other in a familiar game, and 3 times Estelle felt the great sword nick her arm, creating an almost dash-like pattern. It wasn’t an insult, no. It was almost a right of passage at this point in her life. It was after the 3rd hit, a wave of fatigue washed over Estelle, causing her to plant her rapier into the sand, resting herself on the hilt. Sanders stuck his blade into the sand as well, but kept his hand in the hilt, just in case. It was a trait the young princess enjoyed, knowing he was always on guard, even when it was just the two of them.

“I was foolish in my approach with His Majesty,” Estelle broke the silence first, not looking at her Manservant. Sanders didn’t move, which the princess took as a sign to continue. “I feel like the reports from the West are somehow connected. I know His Majesty does not view it this way, and even when I poured over the reports, there is no connecting thread… but…” Estelle sighed, twisting her blade slightly in the sand before continuing, “My gut tells me they are all somehow connected. Missing plants to missing people. No one saw them get taken, but… it feels like a threat is brewing on the horizon…”

“As important as skill is, having intuition in a situation can be just as beneficial.” Though Sanders was a man of little words, every time he spoke, he always stated his opinion so obviously, it was hard to argue around it.

“Thank you, Sanders. When I falter in my belief in myself, you are always there to support me. I truly do not know where I would be if not for you.” Estelle withdrew her rapier, twirling the blade once over her shoulder before deftly catching the hilt within her hand. She swung the blade a few times experimentally before going into a starter pose, waiting for Sanders to join her. She knew the next few rounds would have increased vigor; it was part of their habits. Sanders took only a few seconds before pulling his own sword from the sand and returning her parry. When before, the charges were more one-sided, Estelle taking blow after blow in a mental form of punishment, now, she defended herself, feeling adequately chastised. But now, after taking a few licks, she was renewed, her drive a lit in her soul. Even though Sanders came with a sword nearly the size of her, the Princess held her own, body straining but will never giving.

As the practice fight wore on, Estelle felt herself calming down. Her breathing evened out. Her mind began to clear. It was almost therapeutic, straining the body to the point of exhaustion, but finding clarity in those moments. So, when Sanders landed his next blow, the red-haired Princess was honestly a bit shocked. But she wasn’t upset. In the time, she had considered a solution to her dilemma.

Shifting her stance, her Manservant quickly adjusted his own. She no longer wanted to fight but wasn’t quite ready to put the blade down. Instead, she began practicing different feints, focusing mostly on ‘piercing’ blows and then swinging up to strike. Or ‘striking down’, then shifting the motion into a stab. Still, Sanders could read her movements well, parrying her blade easily enough.

“I think I should go and face His Majesty in the Court. I will bring the reports, and previously dismissed cases, and have him properly hear my plea. The people in the West deserve to have someone who is willing to fight for them.”

Sanders didn’t respond, but paused in his parry, the rapier resting along the flat side of his blade, but his face made Estelle laugh, shaking her head. “I am not going to force my way into the Courts. To earn my F-To show His Majesty how earnest I am in this crusade, I will wake up at Dawn tomorrow and wait in line like a proper solicitor and be heard in front of the Court not as 3rd Princess Estelle Nuryzer but as the citizen Estelle. If His Majesty still has reluctance, then I will properly accept defeat and let this matter drop.”

Feeling envigored, Estelle began her attacks anew, falling from simple feints to proper attacks. Sanders only smiled, the skin around his eyes wrinkling. It seemed he approved the Princess’ plan and let the topic drop. The battle was hard fought, soon both parties were breathing heavily from the exertion, but neither had landed a blow or yielded. But as sweat before to gather in the palms of her hands, Estelle felt the hilt slip slightly as she tried to land a blow. It only cost her half a second, but it was enough for the older man to adjust his own strike and land a sharp whap on the Princess’ shoulder. Letting out a sigh, Estelle collapsed in the practice ring, a soft cloud of dust settling on her skin as she just breathed for a bit.

A well-worn, scarred hand soon came into her vision, and the red-head smiled, graciously accepting it and being pulled to her feet. “To properly execute the plan, Princess, you should go and wash up now and prepare for bed. Solicitors often line up before dawn to make sure they can be heard that day.” Estelle kept her smile and nodded at Sanders’ logic.

“As always, you are right. Thank you for always being there.” She began to move towards the ground’s entrance but paused as she realized she was walking alone. Estelle turned her head, the question obviously written on her face, but before she could ask, Sanders ushered her away, brandishing his sword in her direction lazily. “It wouldn’t make sense for me to wait in line with the solicitors and may raise suspicions if I join you in the morning. You need to rest. I still have a few rounds in me, so go on. I am in no way able nor willing to help you prepare for bed.” Estelle snorted, nodding along with his words. She turned away, hearing as he took up his blade and began to swing it, fighting enemies only seen in one’s Mind Eye. As a child she often skipped lessons to watch Sanders fighting alone on this very ground but having now become the adversary his actions were best witnessed across from his blade, not far away.

Estelle quickly washed; her maids having already had the bathwater prepared before she could request it. Her body was slightly exhausted, having not eaten properly for dinner and then working out right away, so the Princess had assumed sleep would come easily enough. Still, her mind was wide awake, going over all the different reports she had felt were suspiciously connected. She sat up, and walked around her room to her desk, flipping through the papers once more. She had dismissed her staff for the night, wanting to sleep early, but instructed them to wake her before Dawn to prepare for the day.

She laid the pages out before her, arranged not in a timeline of when they came in, but of when the events had occurred. And it felt like though each person reported something different- a small group of cloaked individuals stealing from their garden, a newborn calf missing, 2 young adults assumed to be lovers missing, another raided garden. They were from different areas, and there was no other connection besides all being in the West. But the back of her neck had an odd tingling sensation every time she looked at the reports, as if subconsciously, she knew they were connected. Having realized the candle she had lit had burned down some and nothing new had come to her while reviewing, Estelle sighed, and stood, blowing out the candle and returning to bed.

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 Post subject: Re: Got a Book Idea - First Chapter Posted
Posted: Nov 6th, '24, 06:26    


Rehgai

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Chapter 2

Estelle was not a morning person. Then again, she wasn’t sure if anyone in her family was. As ordered, before dawn, the maids had woken her up and began the normal preparations for the day. Though she was able to fall asleep, few would count it as restful, and the Princess had hoped the solicitors would be few that day. And in a sense, as she stared out her window at the pouring rain, she would get her wish. But it was also eroding her own resolve. Still, she had to stick to her plan and after a quick breakfast, Estelle dressed simply, a cloak covering a plain gown, with a blade strapped to her hip.

Carrying a weapon was not frowned upon Qalendor as most of the military had once been mercenaries and still were recruited to the day. Though it was odd to see a lady carrying a blade, many figured it was because she walked alone. And as she joined the long line of solicitors as the dawn broke, few even looked her way. Many such individuals had travelled for days in hope of seeking help from the Court. It was best to be prepared on such travels.

As the day wore on, the rain did not let up, the droplets raining harshly down on the line. Other folks stuck mostly inside, running quickly through the rain when needed, otherwise trying their hardest to stay dry. Estelle kept her hood up, her hair carefully braided into a tight bun on top of her head when she had been getting ready. Her family had multiple redheads, and often drew a crowds’ attention, even in such horrid weather. So, she kept her hood low, using the excuse of shielding her face from the rain as she waited, the line shifting forward ever so slightly every few minutes. As the day wore on, Estelle noticed the line seemed to be moving faster. It wasn’t because of the build up of heat from the sun- the storm clouds kept it well hidden. No, people were leaving the line, having suffered long enough under the torrent rains. It seemed they would try another day to talk with the Court. It made the Princess smile as it raised her own chances of seeing her father today.

It was hard to distinguish the time as the sun was well hidden, though Estelle assumed it was past lunch as her stomach growled awkwardly. Still, she saw the main entrance to the Courts ahead and knew it would be within an hour or so for her to be standing in front of it. She regretted not packing a snack for her wait, and glancing behind herself, she realized the line was still quite long. It would be foolish to step away so close to the finish. Steeling herself, she stood straighter, ignoring her hunger pains and mentally prepared for the debate she would have to have soon enough. Luckily, below her coat in a beeswax treated case, the documents she had gathered sat, dry away from the rain.

In what felt like an eternity and a flash, she was soon next to be seen. The great entrance way kept the King’s guards and admittance staff dry as they took the next solicitor’s name. They all looked bored and slightly relaxed, as if they too would rather not be stuck outside in the rain, even though they had cover. One of the heralders beckoned Estelle over. With a deep breath, she approached.

The heralder didn’t even look up, a large ledger sitting in front of him. It was 2/3 of the way full, a quick name and statement as to why they wanted to speak in front of the court today. Though Estelle had been taught such practices in lessons, she had never stood before the evaluation before. In her lessons, the position of heralder seemed honorable, a wall between the people and the Court. But this man looked bored to death. Blatantly, she wondered how many of her lessons were sugar coated, never expecting a member of the Royal family to be in a position to question them.

“State your name and business for visiting the courts.” The heralder’s voice had a droning sense to it, like he didn’t want to be there. It stiffened Estelle’s shoulders, but the red head let out a quick breath, relaxing her posture. She wasn’t here as a Princess today. She was a representative of the West.

“My name is Estelle, and I have concerns about events in the West.” She figured a simple answer was best, but an odd energy developed. The guards seemed more at alert. The other heralders, even with their own solicitors, perked up, as if curious about what was about to go down. The one in front of her sighed, adjusting his glasses and pinching the bridge of his nose. For some reason, her statement had upset the man.

“Please, do not use fake names when soliciting the Court. Using false information does not gain any favors in there and will just draw His Majesty’s ire. So, what is your name?” The heralder finally looked up from his ledger, but the hood of the Princess’ cloak was deep, making him only see shadows. Estelle felt herself frowning at his statement, confused.

“My name is Est-“ Before she could continue, the other person raised his hand, cutting her off.

“Try again.” His tone was brisk, and his eyes almost glared at her. She imagined a lesser person withering beneath such a gaze, but this was Estelle, the 3rd Princess who had spoken against her father The Majesty multiple times in her life. Instead of bowing down, the concealed young woman stood straighter.

“I have waited all day in the rain to be able to approach the Court with my issues. My name is Estelle but if you feel I am lying, feel free to put any name you desire. It won’t change what I have to say in front of His Majesty.” Her tone left no room for arguing, and after a silent debate through stares, the heralder sighed, and shook his head.

“It will be you insulting the court, not I. But fine, Lady Estelle, you will be announced shortly.” His tone dripped with sarcasm, but he had mentally moved on from the conversation. Estelle wished she could have caught the man’s name, maybe give him a taste of vengeance later. But as she saw an inner administrative member step out the pull of the next solicitor, she decided to drop it, turning on her heels. Still, her steps were measured and anyone who had been around any sort of nobility for a time could tell she had some etiquette training. The heralder caught her graceful exit, and raised an eyebrow, but waved off his concerns. He saw hundreds of people, many of whom would pretend to be relatives of the King to get ahead in line. Then again, the young woman had waited in line without protest, just to drop the name at the end…

“To the Court, I present, Es-“The herald of the Court paused as he finally read the proclamation, glancing behind himself at the cloaked figure, their hood still pulled firmly over their face, water pooling on the marble floor. His pause had stirred the members of the Court, even the King who had relaxed his posture sat straighter. Gulping, the man began to read the paper aloud once more, “To the Court, I present Estelle, with concerns about Events in the West.” As the name of the solicitor was read, muffled whispers began to circulate around the Hall. Estelle’s name was well known throughout the Kingdom, so having a child named after royalty may have happened, but everyone knew the 3rd Princess had yet to reach 18, so anyone with that name would have to be younger or lying. Most of the whispers wondered who in their right mind would be using it, wondering if they expected to curry favor with the King. But one person did not heed the whispers, and in fact sat at his full height now, studying the cloaked figure with a tense stare. But the person didn’t falter, and in fact began to approach the center of the Court. A thin pale hand came up, dropping the hood and the chatter began once again, louder this time.

Two sets of nearly identical brown eyes stared at each other from afar, as father took in his daughter. Etiquette was thrown out the window, though a few advisors bowed properly when greeting a Princess could be seen at the corner of their eyes. But Estelle hadn’t come to the Court as a Princess, but as a member of the Kingdom, and so she stood, silent, waiting until they settled back down. She didn’t give His Majesty a chance to speak, falling into a proper curtsy and completely silencing the rest of the Court.

“I greet you, His Majesty King Hyder, who blesses this land like Zolarius blesses Giara every morning.” He held her pose; head bowed. Her hair had kept in the tight bun, so she couldn’t use it as a curtain to peer unnoticed, but she kept glancing at her father for the sign to continue. It came a second past a normal expected delay, but after it felt like everyone had begun to hold their breath. A simple wave of his hand and the room collectively released their breath and she straightened. From her lessons and having experienced the line personally, Estelle knew the best thing to do was be quick and concise- dragging out the conversation would lose favor.

“Over the past few weeks, a flood of reports has come in from the West. At a glance, it would seem none of these reports were connected, but from the series, I believe a select few are indeed connected.” She pulled out her scroll case, uncapping it and grabbing the papers from within. She passed it to the nearest knight- she might be of royal blood, but this was The Court, no one could approach the members except an Honored Knight. He was hesitant to grab them, but only briefly, quickly moving them to the large table. The advisors all glanced about themselves, before looking over the paperwork. Most were quite familiar with the reports, having sent aid to those in need, and dismissing it otherwise. Soon, most of the documents ended up at the edge of the table, in the hands of Reilly Varvara, Master of Navigations. Unlike the others, something must have stirred in his mind as he studied the papers a bit longer. But Estelle couldn’t dwell on that now, instead, looking up at her father. “I request to the court to allow me to go an investigate. I will bring my personal Manservant, Sanders, and any knights you wish to accompany me. I would only need the support of rations and manpower only if you want. I would like to head out as soon as the rations are gathered. Thank you for listening to my plea.” Estelle ended her statement with another curtsy, bowing her head a bit lower in respect.

She noticed a few of the masters and advisors were nodding their heads, though if it was because of her delivery, or because of her request, she couldn’t say. Finally, the Speaker, Liha, spoke up. She was the oldest member, once being the Masters of Trades, but with age, she had stepped down. Still, as a well-respected member of the Court, no one wished to remove her entirely. So, she became the voice of the table. Her voice cracked from age, and had a softness to it, but she still spoke loud enough to be heard even across the hall. “Such a request will take time to deliberate, please rest in the waiting area while we speak briefly.” She raised a withered hand, pointing to a set of doors being pushed open by two knights guarding it. There was a brief pause, and a look of concern flashed in Liha’s eyes as she realized she had treated a Princess without using her title, but Estelle already was moving towards the door, smiling gracefully. She spoke, calming the older woman’s nerves, “Like I said before, today, I am Estelle representing the people of the West. I hope we can meet again and exchange proper titles.” Before walking through thedoors, allowing them to deliberate without the prospect being present.

Once she passed through the doors, they were pushed closed, and Estelle found a bench next to some refreshments. No servants were present, as this was not a common area to expect any form of nobility, so the young woman sighed, collapsing slightly onto the bench and resting her eyes for a moment. She worked her pale hands through the tightly wrapped bun on her head, gently massaging her scalp to release some of the tension that had gathered there. She was thankful her maids had suggested a tight updo, making it easier to hide who she was until the last second. And the Court didn’t instantly dismiss her case. In fact, they were talking about it now. She had done her part, and hopefully, she would be allowed to head West. None of the cases had stated any obvious signs of violence or assault, though a few people were missing. Most had recently had something tragic happen, and many assumed the worst. But not all. A few were younger members of the Kingdom, and the current assumption was they eloped with secret lovers or ran away to find a place to prove themselves. Much in a way Estelle was trying to do, by championing for the West.

“Lady Est-er, uh. Your Majesty, 3rd Princess Este-“A knight had pushed open the door, and a heralder had walked in, but being younger, possibly a page, the redheaded couldn’t help but smile as he stumbled on his proper etiquette. It had been a few minutes since she had come into the room, and had re-arranged herself, gently sipping on a water flavored with fresh fruit. Setting down the up, the princess rose, cutting him off with her words, and approached as he began to bow. She touched his shoulder, causing him to freeze, and a blush developed. In a huff of breath, he spoke quickly, “The Court will see you now.”

Estelle nodded, “Thank you for informing me…” and walked past, leaving the young man dumbfounded and uncertain. She noticed the knights who had watched the conversation glance at one another, but neither saluted her, which was fine. The princess never liked watching the knights suddenly standing at attention just to go back to their previous stance. It made her feel like a ripple of superiority. Maybe if she was dressed properly and wearing a crown, such actions would be alright. But not today, when she was still damp from the rain, in plain clothes.

As she found the spot before the Court, Estelle stiffened slightly as she saw her answer already written on many of the members’ faces. They were not looking her way, glancing away and avoiding eye contact. Liha was not standing, instead sitting in her spot and looking down slightly. Only one person kept their gaze steady on her. It was the King. He slowly rose, a ripple of heads turning, all clearly shocked he would speak instead of, well, the Speaker, but no one said anything.

“Estelle, I would like to thank you for your diligence to the people, even those on the far edges of our Kingdom. We have looked over the papers you have provided and cannot merit the actions you have requested. This was the decision of the court.” And with that, the doors leading to the exit were pushed open. Everyone held their breath. Arguments between the King and the 3rd Princess were not unheard of, many staff members reporting to have heard them from behind closed doors. No one could deny she inherited her father’s spirit. But it seemed time had finally matured the girl into a woman as instead of becoming angry and demanding to hear their reasonings, Estelle fell into a curtsy.

“Thank you for taking the time to hear my plea and considering my request. May Chonova stay far away from you and your households, and Dyrth smile upon you every day.” And turned. A few of the Court members responded with similar statements, as it was a common blessing shared when departing, but most seemed confused, as if expecting a fight. Even King Hyder looked slightly taken aback, his dark eyes watching Estelle leave the Court, pulling her hood up as a particularly bright flash of lightning cast her in a silhouette. She disappeared into the storm quickly, presumably to head back to the castle, and left the Court in whispers and side conversations. One person did not join though. Reilly still poured over the documents left behind, frowning. He had a feeling they were connected as well, but didn’t quite know yet.

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 Post subject: Re: Got a Book Idea - First Chapter Posted
Posted: Nov 16th, '24, 05:44    


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I'll get to reading the first chapter later. But is there any way to separate paragraphs? QuQ it kind of just looks like a wall of text lol. I mean, it IS a wall of text but its one without spacing. lol (sorryyyyy~)

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Posted: Nov 16th, '24, 10:57    


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I wont lie- just copying from Word and posting. Will go through and edit it!! Thank you for considering on reading.

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